Improved traffic technology(transportation technology) has made travelling means more various than ever before. People relish their journey by diverse transportation. Some people consider that air travel actually widen(widens) the gap between the rich and poor due to the only benefits it offers to the wealthy group, while the majority of average people are kept far away from the advantages of the development of air travel. Personally, I do not think this is the complete picture.
Admittedly, the cost of flight is much higher than the travelling expense by railway or some other means of transport. The price would be more likely twice or even triple that of trains or buses. Rich people may tend to enjoy its swiftness and comfortableness, while humble citizens prefer to take more care of their purse, giving ways to the endurance of filthy compartments and noisy surroundings in trains and buses.
Nevertheless, the less-wealthy folk(people) are not completely out of the gate. Due to the stagnant market and the fierce competition in the domain of civil aviation companies, plenty of preferential and promotion activities(programs) are offered to consumers which makes(make) air flight possible(affordable) for average people due to the diving price. (For example,) CAAC ever sliced 80% off from the original price to attract more passengers. What's more, some business people have to make the option of flying due to some urgent jobs no matter they are rich or not(no matter what kind of social economic status they are in).
From what discussed above(From what has been discussed above), it seems unreasonable to maintain that air travel offers convenience only to the wealthy people. It is bound to benefit more people, given the more prosperous marketing and more advanced air traffic system.
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专家点评：
本次考试的题目为论述“飞行”这种交通方式是否只对富人有利，而对于大多数人来说并不能享受到这种交通方式的便利。
这道题的话题还是比较容易论述的：因为随着全球化的扩张和深化，“飞行”已经成为常用的旅行方式之一，成为了人们日常生活的一部分。比如说，在国内正逢春运高峰，而近几年的春运，并非只有铁路和公路运输承担着重大的压力，航空公司也是一票难求。随着人民生活水平的提高和航空运输业的发展，飞机票的价格也不像从前那样的遥不可及。无论是公事还是私事，这种交通方式已经被普遍应用和接受。更何况，即使是普通人也有出国旅行的实力，那也是必然要选择飞行的。再者来说，目前通往机场的交通方式也得到了大幅的改观。拿上海来说，只要话上不到20元的价格，就能从市中心乘坐机场大巴到机场。即使是乘坐先进的磁悬浮列车，花费也不过在50元而已。这跟以往机场独立于城市之外，没有便捷的交通抵达的情况是不能相提并论的。
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