小作文
Dear,[D23]
I am student who live in a room in college which share with another student.I am in troubble[D24] .I need your help.I find it I can not very difficult to work [D25] .The immediate cause[D26] is my rommate always has friends visiting[D27] . They disturb me all the while[D28] . So I want to change my room . A single room is best choose[D29] . Thanks。
Yours
Monica
评语:1.你的字数明显不够,字数不够扣分是非常严重的,如果不是万不得已,哪怕你是简单句,也得凑够字数。
2.你的单词拼写和语法错误都较多,说明基本的词汇掌握的还不够,语法要多掌握基础的知识。记得单词拼写一定不能错太多,一个0.5分呢?你一篇错个五六个,再加上其他语法错误,就难保及格了。一定要注意单词背诵和基础语法。小作文的就那么几个题型,每个题型的常用句式一定要背熟练。
[e1]多余的,应删除
[e2]此句有误,though后面应连接完整句,而不是定语从句。应改为:Though two men both lost one of their legs。
[e3]你这句话的意思是他们跑的目的在于合作,但漫画的意思应是他们合作的结果是跑。最好改为:by cooperating
[e4]应为helps
[e5]应为lives
[e6]冒号删除
[e7]通常复数后面只加’。如果是单词以s结尾还是要加’s的
[e8]Discussion
[e9]Club together是动词,去掉前面的are
[e10]动名词作主语,应为helping
[e11]instance
[e12]factories
[e13]删除
[e14]应为动词形式dispose
[e15]Peoples表示民族的意思,如表示很多人则people不加s
[e16]应为paid
[e17]应为having
[e18]应为helping
[e19]应为results
[e20]no one 的意思是没人,应为everyone
[e21]finish
[e22]meliorating
[D23]Dear what?在不知道对方称呼的情况下,用sir or madam,
[D24]In trouble
[D25]I find it difficult to work; sb find it +adj+to do,表示某人发现做某事很怎样。
[D26]这个词用的好
[D27]The immediate cause is that my roommate always has friends visiting
[D28]常用all the time
[D29]Is the best choose
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